假定英语课上老师要求同桌之间交换修改作文, 请你修改你同桌写的

假定英语课上老师要求同桌之间交换修改作文, 请你修改你同桌写的以下作文。文中共有10处语言错误, 每句中最多有两处。每处错误仅涉及一个单词的增加、删除或修改。

增加:在缺词处加一个漏字符号(∧), 并在其下面写出该加的词。

删除:把多余的词用斜线(﹨)画掉。

修改:在错的词下画一横线, 并在该词下面写出修改后的词。

注意:1. 每处错误及其修改均仅限一词。

         2. 只允许修改10处, 多者(从第11处起)不计分。

 I was excited when I heard about that our community is to have its own McDonald’s restaurant. I thought about all those young people whose would not have to go to the next town to buy our favorite burgers and chips. McDonald’s cares about healthy eating too and work with scientists to provide food that is of high quality, safe and health. They often provide salads so well as burgers and chips. You can also choose between cola milk shakes. Of course it also means more work for our area that needs jobs bad. McDonald’s says they are interested on doing what is right for the community and being good neighbor. So I think they will be concerned about provide parking for the cars in our main streets.

I was excited when I heard about that our community is to have its own McDonald’s restaurant. I thought about all those young people whose would not have to go to the next town to buy our favorite burgers and chips. McDonald’s cares about healthy eating too and work with scientists to provide food that is of high quality, safe and health. They often provide salads so well as burgers and chips. You can also choose between cola milk shakes. Of course it also means more work for our area that needs jobs bad. McDonald’s says they are interested on doing what is right for the community and being good neighbor. So I think they will be concerned about provide parking for the cars in our main streets.

1. about 去掉

2. is改为was

3. whose改为who

4.work改为works

5. health改为healthy

6.so改为as

7. cola与milk中间加and

8. bad改为badly

9.on改为in

10,。Provide改为providing